Aw, I really love this story... It's so adorable. I think the way you portrayed Sonic is great. Definetely one of the best slavery fics.
Aw, poor Shadow... I really should have reviewed this story before, it's great. Keep going with it!
Author's Response: better late than never lol. I'm glad u like it. the story has been going smooth (if u minus the amateur moments and my laziness since i won't go and fix some grammar issues) again thx
Ha, I was gonna say that you should make a chapter where Sonic is seme. Nice chapter, poor Sonic, left all alone :( I hope you continue!
Author's Response: lol Sadly Sonic won't be seme in this story
Hmm, so now Shadow owns both Sonic AND Tails. This just made things a whole lot more interesting... And complicated. This really is a great story, my only gripe? You don't update enough.
Oh, and you really should keep the chapters in line with what's over at FF.net...
Author's Response: Updates should be a bit more frequent - and Ta-daah, we caught up to ffnet here. Enjoy! :)
You sonova... Damn you and your cliffhangers. They're so damn cheap... And yet I still come back. I guess I'm just a sucker for this fic. Very nice chapter, I thought the interactions between Shadow and Tails were very cute. I sure hope Shadow gets back before Drago does... Something...
Author's Response: Cheap cliffies ftw. see whether shadow manages to be back in time...and thanks for the review!^^
That was HOT! Easily one of the best lemons I have read. And I wonder what Sally's planning to do with that Daravest guy... Anyway, please continue this!
Author's Response: Thank you for the comment about how naughty I can go with a lemon. Second, this story will be continued.
Hmm, so Shadow had already fallen for Sonic? Interesting... I do hope you continue this, I'd love to read more!
Author's Response: Hehe, yeah. Decided to do it a little differently. :) I have to write a new chappy soon~
Eh, it's alright, I guess. I just found a few bits that seemed odd. For example, WHY did Sonic feel the need to tie Shadow up and lock him in the cupboard? Why did Shadow ask Sonic if he was gay, right out of the blue? That said, the story was alright, there were a few spelling and grammar mistakes, nothing big. I'd be interested to see what else you can do.
Author's Response: Omg thank you, I dunno why he asked it I just didn't know how else to make it up to be sonadow if Shadow just walked to Silver instead, then it would be shadilver but this site is for sonadow, and with the Shadow part where he gets tied up, that was because I wanted Sonic to be a naughty boy, that was why he gave him that beer. I have sometimes problems to find my mistakes, so sometimes I need to read it more than one time, that's why it took me so long to write it, and make it long at the same time.
OK, can I just say, never, EVER try to describe a character while in first person. All it does is break flow. The story itself is not too bad, though Heartless is quite an obvious red herring (The guy who looks evil NEVER is). Everyone is completely in character, and the premise is an interesting one. I hope you continue.
Author's Response: I'll try remember that, next time I will make a story, then I won't describe a person. ^^ I think I would first off make this story done before starting a new. Yeah I know that people who look evil never are, it's so funny. XD I'll start to make number two. ^^
OK, I'm a little confused. Why is Sonic being so angst because no one's hanging with him? Why is Shadow drunk? Why is Sonic acting kinda stalker-like? Your story isn't too bad, but it's hard to follow. Your grammar is awful. I'm sorry, but it really is. I get the feeling you just typed this straight into the 'Story' box, which is forgiveable if this is your first fic, but still. I typed this review on my mobile, a Telstra one no less, and it's gramatically superior to your story. Next time, try typing it in Word or something, and copy-pasting it, hm? All in all, your fic isn't good, but it's not terrible either. I've seen far worse fics than this. Please try to improve, because you do seem to have a creative spiri, and I'd like to see what you can come up with in the future. 2/5.
Author's Response: wow harsh words! But i can tell that you are helping me so thanks. In the future the story will be better, more explaned and more time spent then this one, But as for 'stalker-like' I didn't want it to come off like that. so thanks for telling me my mistakes i'll fix them as i go on! =]
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