Rated: NC17 - Adult
[Reviews - 221]
The Alpha Vampire abandons the rest of his kind with a small gang of rebel Vampires, Hunters, and family Mortals. When Hunter Shadow comes across the Vampire King, the Alpha's Blood Lust spirals out of control; thing is, Hunters are unable to die or turn at the bite of a Vampire.
Category: Sonadow
Characters: None
Genres: Adventure
Warnings: Sex
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 | Completed: No | Word count: 11538 | Read count: 8928
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Published: November 28, 2010 | Updated: January 05, 2011
Date: January 07, 2011 Title: Chapter 5: True Nature of the Vampire King
Hm, to be honest I'm not sure what to make of this. The writing is well, except for one slip Espio had earlier in the story where he was speaking about Mephiles being a possible suspect to the wolf clan's murder. You write 'Him' instead of 'He' in the dialogue. Aside from that slip I haven't seen anything else.
Unfortunately I think what's kind of putting me off on the story so far is that the characters don't seem to be ringing true. Sonic is supposed to be an Alpha, but not only does he get his tail kicked several times in the story, all within the same day it seems like, but he also has tunnel vision. I understand he's under pressure, but he seems to be acting rather out of character for Sonic, and the explainations you give don't seem satisfactory. He backhanded Shadow, and then Shadow felt bad about that? Something about that doesn't seem to ring true to me, considering Shadow has quite a bit of an ego and is extremely prideful. I was halfway expecting Shadow to nail a stake in Sonic's heart, especially after seeing that grizzly scene in the forest. But right after that he ended up cuddling up to Sonic at night?
I might have ranted about that for a bit, but I honestly find that largely ignorable in the grand scheme. You have a wonderfully written and engaging story on your plate! I really look forward to the next chapter!
Rated: PG - Suggestive
[Reviews - 109]Category: Sonadow
Characters: Shadow x Sonic
Genres: Romance/Fluff
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 3146 | Read count: 4360
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Published: December 13, 2010 | Updated: December 13, 2010
Date: January 15, 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Knight and Day
I thought I had reviewed this before, but I can't be certain of that now... maybe on FF.net?
Personally I loved the story. I'm a sucker for this genre and I'm of the opinion that there needs to be more of it. There wasn't much to work for as far as this idea goes, but I'm not sure that was the point precisely. You seemed to be writing to develop Lancelot as a character and show the inner workings of his mind. You did that marvelously while focusing on the conflicts concerning his honor, duty, and morals.
I also loved how you developed Galahad's character. Personally he was always my least favorite of the knights considering how lackluster and perfect his character seemed, but giving him a nervous tick like fidgeting with his gloves made him all the more relatable to me! Great job! I really admire your way of creating lively characters.
You honestly managed to crawl into Lancelot's head and give the reader a thorough understanding of the character. There was tension in this simple story and that made it all the more appealing. You truly immerse yourself in your world and that is one thing I have always admired about you. It's something a lot of writers (myself included) lack. Cracking a modern joke in a story like this would be easy, but you hold a sort of sophistication by keeping it true to its older roots.
Now if I reviewed before and said something totally different, well... then I guess I reviewed twice!