I haven't seen many stories that have captured my attention on this site, but this story seems to have broke that.
Update soon. =)

As soon as you say 'violence' Takashi is reading. XD Now, about the '1' thing.... Any number under twenty, I do believe, is written in words. And 'i' is not a word, but a letter. Try capitalizing them.
But your lines were well written, I'd say. Nice job. *thumbs up* Keep up the good work. ^^