I think the problem here, my friend, was that you gave away too much of the gameplan at the beginning. Perhaps you could of expanded some by keeping Sonic's origins a secret that had to be slowly exposed. This adds an air of suspense and mystery to the story. Sure, the characters didn't know right away, but telling us that kind of took the fun out of it.

Just posting my two cents ^^'

Author's Response: I guess, I didn't really realize that. I could have written everything differently though. I had a plan B, but this was a sudden burst of inspiration to actually pick up the pen and write. What I was doing for the first chapter was the prologue sorta...idk. >.< I'm sort of tired, preparing to go out of state for a wedding in two weeks. So trying to get my online class done is screwing me up. I feel honored that you read this though, the mighty master :)