That was pretty cool. A Mobian-hedgehog-artificial-ultimate lifeform-vampire...I never would have thought about him with huge bat wings before, though.
Uhm...Could I please ask...What kind of ending was that?! No offence, but it needs some serious editing. The capitals are not there. And also, I don't know about other people, but I thought it went a little too fast. You know, the realtionship. But I thought that the tail wagging thing was really cute. Good luck with writing if you are planning on continuing writing! ;) 7/10.
Love it might make one with sonic as a werehog now!
Okay, I am sorry. I looked it over again and it has some potential. I do like it somewhat, suprisingly for a story that has vampires in it, It just needs to be stretched out. I can help you rewrite this story if you wish just email me.
golf_man_25@hotmail.com
Author's Response:okay. I'll email ya
Yeah...sorry but Soniklos is right. I just didn't say that because I didn't want to seem like a ass.
There actually is a great story concept in this, but you could have made it MUCH better.
Author's Response:I understand ^^
Am I supposed to be impressed by this story? This is just something that you typed up in about five minutes. Come on, I could have written this better and in ten long chapters. Good effort though.
Author's Response:well I'm sorry i'm not that good a writer! This is a story I'm doing with a friend na dits the first one I've put on! Please don't be nasty to me!
Uh...good story..but couldn't you have expanded it a lot more? Like at least mention how they became vampires and werhogs? The story went by a bit fast...
Author's Response:Yeah I know. I also think I went a bit too fast. Me and my friend are writing this and she likes to go through stories quickly. I'll have to tell her to slow down ^^;
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